Aftermath of Brothers, Battles and Bonds
"Rejoice, brother! We vanquished those fiends."
A Parent Always Worries
A worried Dasharatha sits on his throne, waiting for his sons to return. They had left for battle days ago and, if everything went well, should be home soon. So when the doors open he glances up in hope. Is it his sons? It is! He jumps up and rejoices.
Dasharatha worried for his sons
Author's Note: These two stories are inspired by the very first part of the Ramayana but I also had my version of it in mind. (You can find that version here). In both versions Dasharatha cares deeply for his sons and so sending them away to fight against demons worries him. In my version, I expanded on the first fight with a demon that occurs in the Ramayana and then they return home after defeating a group of demons who were harassing some sages, unlike the original in which their journey continues.
For the 6 word story above I wanted to try and convey what the brothers, Rama and Lakshmana, would be feeling once they defeat the demons and eventually came up with the idea to do that with a quote one of them might say.
For the 50 word story above I focused more on their father and what he would be feeling. All he can do is sit back and wait for them to come home so I chose to write about how his feelings of worry would turn into feelings of joy once his sons are home.
For the 6 word story above I wanted to try and convey what the brothers, Rama and Lakshmana, would be feeling once they defeat the demons and eventually came up with the idea to do that with a quote one of them might say.
For the 50 word story above I focused more on their father and what he would be feeling. All he can do is sit back and wait for them to come home so I chose to write about how his feelings of worry would turn into feelings of joy once his sons are home.
Bibliography: Ramayana, Public Domain Edition by M. Dutt, R. Dutt, Gould, Griffith, Hodgson, Mackenzie, Nivedita, Oman, Richardson, and Ryder. Web source
Rapheal,
ReplyDeleteMicrofictions are so fun to read, and even more fun to create! I think you did a great job with this, and I like that you included two instead of just one. I think the first story definitely conveys how the boys were feeling after winning the fight. The second story really portrays how their father was feeling while they were away and the joy he felt when his sons had finally returned. Awesome job, I'm excited to read more of your stories!!
Hello Rapheal,
ReplyDeleteI liked your two microfictions, especially the first one. When writing microfictions, every word has to convey as much as possible, and I thought you chose the correct words very carefully. The first story conveys joy very well, while the second story conveys fatherly concern.
Rapheal, that was so cool to read! Microfictions are honestly like poems; they convey messages that can sometimes be hard to decipher or truly understand what is being said. I, myself, didn't exactly know what your intentions were in writing the first quote until I read the Author's Note. These microfictions keep me guessing and I love it! So creative, keep up the great work.
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ReplyDeleteMicro fictions are my new favorite story labs to read, because I love seeing the beginning story versus the one with more details. Whenever I read these, I always try and imagine where the six word stories could lead to, but I can confidently say I have never even been close! Maybe one day I will get closer, but for now it is interesting to read everyone else's ideas!
Hi Rapheal, I've been waiting to read some microfictions in this class, and I'm glad the randomizer took me to your stories! I did the microfiction lab too, and I found it quite challenging. Your six word story is really impactful, and the subject matter of your fifty word story really lends itself to the microfiction format. You made a great choice to just focus in on the trepidation Dasharatha felt when his sons left for war.
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